Limyaael

That made for some very good writing. The only criticism I have is that you might want to make some of your paragraphs a little thicker - at least for me, it becomes hard to read consecutive pages of dozens of tiny paragraphs. Weird criticism, I know.

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Thanks! I'm not sure the paragraphs will get thicker, because the other chapters will include different viewpoint characters and that's one of the things that tends to alter the size of my paragraphs, but we'll see.

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Love your worldbuilding rants. I'm curious if you will be doing anything or are retired from ranting about worldbuilding?

I'd like to see a entry about medieval buisness (or just buisness through the ages past - before capitalstic theory and other theories of the sharing of wealth.)

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But first I have to finish a novel, let alone try to write one in a month.

Also, friended so hard. I finally wandered over from LJ. Hi again!

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Hello! *friends back*

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I liked it. It reminded me of Ursula K. Le Guin because of the way you protray your world and your characters. I definitely get the sense that it's a different world and the characters are products of their world, not imports from our world. I want to learn more about the characters and their world.

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I have to wonder, what is the pronunciation for all the names? Oh, and balconies? You might want to describe the wagons a bit.

I do like how Corissith is caught, though. (when he's fake sleeping) It's funny.

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